The snap -
The poem -
Mad moments few,
Will be drenched in dew
Lost in the darkness; my wry laments;
Just a handful
A handful of bitter tears;
Deeply blistering tears –
Scarlet scars painted; on
Crimson cheeks tainted;
Of pain;
Of love slain;
Like Cain;
Of Abel slain;
An elegy;
Of a love lost.
An orgy of a melancholy;
At a hearts cost.
Anguish; Ache;
Vodka; Sake;
I cry alone every night,
Dipping and drenching my shattered soul; in
A handful of bitter tears;
Deeply blistering tears –
I cry alone every night,
To remember the moments I spent laughing with her.
The bliss; the heaven;
The kiss; the Beethoven;
My love, my bow;
My Soul, my Spirit;
Lass of an angel;
In the bass of love;
Oh…. I lost her, I lost her
I lost her, I lost her……
Please do not disturb me; When
I cry….. Alone every night.
Author’s note –
The above poem also is based on a Tamil poem that I wrote while travelling to Coimbatore a few days back (I haven’t posted the Tamil poem but if you guys want to read the original Tamil poem, I will post it later). My sis says that I can be pretty depressing with my words sometimes. The above poem according to her is one of them. I don’t really agree with her. I think that pain in love is the ultimate salvation in life.
PS –
I actually am posting this poem from a browsing center nearby my home. The broadband connection in my home has been having a lot of problems lately and I have not been able to tweet or to blog regularly because of that. I have registered a complaint and I think that those BSNL guys will take a couple of days to look into the problem. I will be offline till then. Really funny things have been happening lately and I do have a lot of smiles to spill to you guys and will do so once I come back online. :):)
Until then.
Cheers….
muthu
44 comments:
ohh great the poem is absolutely fine!
and the smiles you are surrounded with make me a lil curious :)
how how do you do it!
oru kiss-ukey beethoven effect kodukum bodhu i thought, is this another love failure poem..
but there are other lines which say , it is not..
liked this one..chriz
"Pain in love is the ultimate salvation." !!
This piece wowed me off and this particular thought pushed e off the edge..I'd never, before looked at love with such a perception.
Wonderlicious !!
nice poem like it
pain in love
if there is no pain can we call it love ?
Love n pain is the same thing...in fact i was shocked when i started reading this...some time back i was just juggling with the concept of pain being love turned around n vice versa n how ridiculous it is on our parts to think of love as 'happily ever after'.....n then i read this piece of creation...which summarised whatever i had concluded!!
what a lovely coincidence!!
i loved this a lot n cannot pinpoint any stanza as the best because all the lines were beautiful...just wondering who u lost? :)
All the best with BSNL! ciao:)
Dude r u in serious love pain always ?? Wass cooking ?? Go fetch her !!!
I think this pain was for the loss of the broadband! :)
But I do agree that the pain from love is a privilege of the few. But its like that Bacchan ad where he says, "Dard hame kuch sikhata hai".
I think its best to love and learn from others get hurt in love. :)
Cheers,
Velu
This was an amazing Poem !!! Gr8 work :-)
Wat does travelling do to you?? To me It does fascinates to look out of the window or to read only!! :D
this work is b'ful though it projects the itch..
P.S. things okay with Sakthi??
@ Ad - thanks 4 your compliments yaar..
and really... I think we need to smile to see some 1 smile... :):)
cheers....
@ chronic writer - thanks 4 your compliments chriz....
yeah.. even i liked it after i saw what i had wrote.... :P:D
will soon a write a poem on a kiss alone.. :)
@ cindrella - I am glad you my poem moved you... :)
A sm - pain, no pain i have no idea but it sucks to miss her at the same time it is wonderful to think of missing her....
get me.... paradoxical = love.. :)
@ vinnie - hmhm... am happy to have written what you were contemplating.....
will be on line as soon as possible....
cheers
ciao.
@ rahul - my love life is a trajectory of romantical mishaps... bro.
will write abt them in later posts.... :)
@ velu - you were right on the bulls eye bro..
"Dard hame kuch sikhata hai"
and love lets us learn abt ourselves.... :)
@ puneet - thanks 4 your compliments puneet....
@ richa - haha.... traveling always wakes me up to everything around me....
and whats the itch???? :D
and abt sakthi....
ask her.......
very powerful imagery - i haven't read anything like this before.
"The bliss; the heaven;
The kiss; the Beethoven;"
- very powerful imagery indeed.
my first time here and i will definitely visit back for more.
Great Muthu, a lot of touching and nostalgic thoughts
amazing work buddy :)
In my line of sight
Wow, you have a great poetic heart! Keep up the great posts….. Good job!
I have a poem blog....
Meet me at
http://www.poems-of-nature.blogspot.com/
@ abishek sim - thanks 4 your compliments.. and do visit again... :)
cheers.....
@ nsiyer - thanks 4 your comments sir... I am glad i made you nostalgic... :)
@ amal bose - thanks man.... :)
@ femin susan - thanks 4 your comments... will sure visit your blog....
cheers... :)
awww... what a poem..touched me through and through...
@ Neha - Am so so glad my words moved you..... :)
Painful. :(
But great work nonetheless. :)
Cheers
@ bond gal - thanks and yeah I myself found it painful reading it after i wrote it. :)
i always believe to know what is happiness...you have to know the extremity of sadness...
this poem was heart touching...i like d it a lot...!!!
loved it!loved it!
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@ Anjan Roy ---
Thank-you for your warm comments. :)
hmhm..... I think sadness depends on perspective. But anyways, a good deal of sadness does help in writing good poems. :P
@ anurag hundal --
:)
the bliss; the heaven;
The kiss; the Beethoven;
My love, my bow;
My Soul, my Spirit;
There us flow in these lines that makes you float. Muthu, very fine writing!
I could feel the pain along with you..Beautful poem :)
Keep Blogging!
@ Meenakshi Malhotra ---
Thank you... And am glad that you liked the poem.. :)
@ Nasir --
hmhm.... Welcome to love!!
Beautiful expressions there. Initially I thought this was a tribute to the innocent children and lives lost in the shooting and slashing. It was only when I neared the end, I realized its something else. But its still so poignant. And I'm still in a depressed mood from the weekend, so I guess it touches a raw nerve somewhere :(
@ Deeepa---
hmhm.... I think a piece of ourselves drip into the words we are writing. And if we can write what exactly we are feeling- then that alone, I think will make one insane writer.
Thank you for your comments. I do hope I did not put down you too much.
Will sure make it up soon with a nice humor post. :)
Hey its not you, its just the mood that made the post resonate with the happenings! You keep doing the good work you always do!
I turned emotional after reading this... :(
Noopur
http://apparitionofmine.blogspot.in/
@ Deepa --
Thank-you.. :)
@ Noopur Kothari --
That's the best compliment anyone can get about what they pen. That people can relate to the same.
Thanks a lot. That meant a lot to me. :)
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