The Quote -

"Nope, I don't really have anything new to say. but then, I always have something amazing to tell about things that you already know!!"

-Muthu

Wednesday, April 15, 2009

And then, she cried- 55 fiction

Author's note: I came across the idea of writing short stories with just 55 words called 55 fiction and was quite intrigued by the concept. And so i have tried to write a few 55 fiction here in my own style. Though these stories are based on the same situation I have tried to capture the various ways in which the situation would have turned out with different responses from the male character to the female protagonist.I am looking forward to your comments.


For more information on 55 fiction, kindly visit here.







The wish:




You are going to cry……… Aren’t you?

She tried ignoring him staring at the dark skies. Noticing a shooting star she closed her eyes and wished she would just die. Her hidden tears jumped out and streaked across her face along with the sudden rain.

“Now you wouldn’t know? Would you?” She asked





The rebuke:





Are you going to cry?

She hit back “Do you want me to……….” The dark skies took contempt at her rebuke and started to throw rain drops at her.

She shivered and he offered her his coat. She refused and continued to shiver. At least the rain stood by her without asking stupid questions.





The lone flowers:




Please don’t cry

He begged her but she couldn’t just stop the tears as they flowed from her eyes streaking across her face blurring the starry sky. The rain started to wail along with her as if it too chose to ignore his consolatory efforts. And they both cried their pained hearts out each alone and each together.





The dawn:




He did not say anything and he didn’t need to. He just held her tight as she cried, cried and cried, until the tears and the rain washed away her pain. Then he said

Let go

She nodded. In the distant skies the dawn was slowly brushing out the last ghosts of the dark night.





Author's note:

In the fourth story I have tried to bring out that the rain and the girl were crying alone and in that they were together.

16 comments:

Puneet Parakh said...

you write too good !!!!

Rajlakshmi said...

very touching write :)

deeps said...

ohhh a story written with a poet's pen ??
great going ...

Vinnie said...

good ones!
i loved The Rebuke best..
The Dawn second best :)

am reading more ..

muthu said...

@ puneet - thanks again man.....

@ rajlaxmi - Am happy that you felt that way... :)

@ deeps - a poets pen.... wow thats some compliment, thanks man.

@ vinnie - I loved the wish best... (though i felt it was a bit corny)

pink dogwood said...

great stories - I like dawn and rebuke :)

muthu said...

@ pink - thanks..... hmhm gals tend to like rebuke more ....i suppose they relate some incident in their own lives to it....

Nimisha said...

very very interesting blog! I've just about managed to read a few posts. and all were equally wonderful! :-)

muthu said...

thanks nimisha.....

do keep visiting and reading.....

thanks again 4 your compliments....

and hey you have a hearty smile......

The Dramaqueen said...

Wow.
Nice. You were right! I liked it!
I should try the 55 words thing too :) Maybe I will!

muthu said...

thanks D....

Am eagerly awaiting your 55 fictions..... :)

So what are you gonna write your story about.....

Swetha Padakandla said...

okay!
this is somethng i call truly awesome..

nice way of writing skills u have..
thnx for visiting mine..

keep going
swetha

muthu said...

thanks 4 your compliments swetha - I enjoyed visiting your blog... :)

Do keep reading my posts.....

Every Photo Tells A Story said...

I never heard about 55 fiction, it is a very interesting concept. Especially since I don't have the attention span to read very long stories anymore. I like "The lone flowers" section the best.

Be well, Muthu:)

muthu said...

@ every photo... - thanks man... do visit again sometime... i have penned a few more 55 fictions.... :)

The Write Girl said...

These are all so wonderful. The last story is beautiful. Thanks for the link to 55 fictions. Very nice.