The Quote -

"Nope, I don't really have anything new to say. but then, I always have something amazing to tell about things that you already know!!"

-Muthu

Monday, June 22, 2009

The Elegy of the coitus- A short story

The snap:




The story:

Note: This story has two plausible endings like taking two different routes to come to the same finale. One is the shorter route “The Slap” and the other one is the longer one “The Kiss”. The slap has a very abrupt ending and leaves a lot for the reader’s own deduction and understanding. The kiss has a long and fully explained ending giving the reader all the facts of one possible assumed ending that the story can take. As the name suggests, the slap may be offensive, but do read the kiss and then comment.




The Conversation-


You know something….

What??

I….. I have always wondered….

Wondered??

Well if you hear this, you may think I am bit of a freak. I know this kind of thought is rarely expressed but I think that all the married girls will at least think about it, one time or another.

Hm hm…

The thing is I really don’t know how to start it. I am afraid I am going to be blunt with you. Is that ok with you?

Ok..

Ok, here it goes… I have always wondered what it would be like to actually have sex in a physical sense and then get pregnant as a result. Not getting impregnated with sperm from your husband’s removed balls. In my case your ……………removed balls.

Huh???

Well it’s not like I don’t like doing it with you. I love you. I love making love to you. But its just that I kind a don’t feel it right getting pregnant artificially. You know what I mean, don’t you??

Kind a!!

The thing is ….. Can’t you keep a check over the population by using other contraceptive stuff ---condoms and ? Do you really need to go this extreme as to making all men seedless on their marriage and storing away their balls in a cryogenic freeze??

But..

Yeah, I know we humans don’t have enough living space and the population has been in control after implementing this system but I really think that its odd, to have a technician say to you that you have been artificially impregnated and you are pregnant. It simply lacks the surprise and the pleasant anxiety of waiting for the doctor’s verdict of your pregnancy.

Hmhm…… yup..



Ending 1 - The Slap:


More than that, you know what I think ………. I think that when we alter nature, it has its own side effects on which we can have no control over. Of course, we always know the probability of things that are to happen, perhaps like the toss of a coin but what if on the toss, the ceiling falls down and no ones left to see the result of the toss.

Huh???

Yeah, that’s highly improbable with the advanced neural networks looking after the sequence of our daily activity. But I do have my qualms after going through chaos theory in detail. Taking in hand a theory that says anything can affect anything and using it to predict everything is quite contradictory. Don’t you think so?

May be….

Yeah, it is….. It is a clear case of conflicting interests.

Baby, just a second….

What??

Can you just turn over please…… I want to do it in your anus now.



Ending 2- The Kiss

More than that, you know what I think ………. I think that when we alter nature, it has its own side effects on which we can have no control over. Of course, we always know the probability of things happening, perhaps like the toss of a coin but what if on the toss, the ceiling falls down and no ones left to see the result of the toss.

Huh???

That’s highly improbable with the advanced neural networks looking after the sequence of our daily activity. But I do have my qualms after going through chaos theory in detail. Taking in hand a theory that says anything can affect anything and using it to predict everything is contradictory. Don’t you think so?

May be….

Yeah, it is….. It is a clear case of conflicting interests.

Baby, one sec….

What??

I think I am done.

Oh, ok then. Let’s get dressed up. By the way do you really think that these experiments and reports will do any good? May be, will help us to get back what we have lost or in the least understand what we have lost.

Frankly, I don’t know.




--The report:

Experiment no- 4561; Experiment code- d beta; Date- 12-10-3045;

There is still no available practical proof of why our ancestors practiced the act of sex or coitus other than to create their own progeny. The material evidence suggests that the coitus must have been quite a pleasurable experience to undergo for both the male and the female. But the experimental evidence suggest otherwise. Further research into the dead end theory that suggests “hormonal changes that must have resulted from the complete birth control technique implemented a century ago must have done irreversible damages to several primal hormones destroying the sexual drive and the coital pleasure of humans” is advised.



The End-




Author's note-

I have used the idea of chaos theory in this science fiction. Chaos theory in simple words can be said as a theory that suggests that every random happening in turn causes another random happening that may in essence never be related. For example, the flutter of the butterfly wings in California may cause a cyclone in Sri Lanka (hence the theory is also called the butterfly effect.
A lot of movies & novels have been based on this Idea. Eg- The movie Jurassic park & the novel- The lost world on which it's based. The movie- Butterfly effect. For more information on the theory- try this- [link]


This is one of the first science fictions that I wrote long time back. I have tried to give a fiction that forwards itself just by the conversation between two individuals. The idea of an alternative ending was inspired by Jeffrey Archer's short story - One man's meat, that had 3 different endings. Though I am not a serious fan of Jeffrey Archer's short stories, I found the idea worth a try. I myself love short stories(science fictions) of Sever Gansovsky, who is my soul inspiration as a short story author. His stories have not just awed me but have always left me inspired and thinking. I just want to achieve the same with my stories.


PS-

I am a bit sick with fever, running cold and infected throat guys so I was not able to blog for a few days. And thats why i am posting this story that I did a while back. I think I will get back to my usual cheery self in a couple of days. Will sure post a few stories that I am mentally working on.


Until then-

Cheers..

Muthu

22 comments:

lightseek said...

Gibberish to the inexperienced thinker, but pure genius if this piece is experienced by the higher end of the population who hone the right mindset and ability to relate. Great one!

Vinnie said...

u should delve deeper into science fiction...this was a gripping piece...i liked both endings!

i dunno whats in store for 2100 n u have envisioned 3045 ! great creative vision man:-)

Rahul Viswanath said...

Olala ...... It always will end in sex ...... good piece bro ;-)

sm said...

good story

Marina said...

I don't know if I was smart enough to appreciate the finer, more um intellectual points, but I did enjoy reading it! =D

muthu said...

@ Marina- :):) am glad U enjoyed reading it.. :)

bondgal_rulz said...

WHOAAA!!!!

Very very interesting Muthu!! You should write more of these! :)

Cheers

muthu said...

hmhm.... :D am so happy U liked this..

Sure will write more.. :)

cheers..

Shalu Sharma said...

Very nice indeed.

muthu said...

@ Shalu Sharma --

hmhm....- I myself don't really know whether this story warrants a nice. (considering the topic and my idea). thanks.. :) And welcome to my blog. :)

medha kapoor said...

wow! This is very well written. A great read.

D.Nambiar said...

Now I know what chaos theory is. :)

I like your idea of Author notes. :)

Anupama K. Mazumder said...

Bold topic!

muthu said...

@ D.Nambiar --

Thanks.. And am glad to have introduced chaos theory to you. :)

muthu said...

@ Anupama K. Mazumder --

Yeah, It a Bold one- I loved writing the fiction. Was not really sure, how people will respond to the idea. I mean, its kind of quite a long stretch on reality but the, I felt that that's really how science has been growing.

If you are going to tell people in the 18 th century about nanotechnology, they will just be dumb-folded and also, I think that science not just improves our life- It changes the way we live.

Imagine a world without electricity, without petroleum- we just lose control of how much we are depending on science and technology, that we get accustomed to it like our fingers.

The story is just an extension of that idea. :)

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