The Quote -

"Nope, I don't really have anything new to say. but then, I always have something amazing to tell about things that you already know!!"

-Muthu

Thursday, December 6, 2012

"Her nightmare": My entry for the Get Published contest





The Idea-

Yes. The fiction is about love. Not just that ephemeral string of amber tones between the lovers themselves. It is about the tight bonds that are strained between the parents and their kids involved. A youngster in the final year of her engineering graduation gets caught red handed by her mother while chatting with her lover in skype.

Of course, she is placed in a well reputed MNC. Her career is secure.
Of course, she has always been given ample freedom to make her own decisions.
Of course, her parents have always been more friends and guides than the conservative meaning of the word.
Of course, the boy she loved is a senior executive working in management sector, is a responsible guy earning handsomely, not just loved her but cared about every aspect of her and her family.
Their love was heartfelt.

But, all that’s for naught, when her mother confronts her with the raw fact that she had to find out about her daughter’s love like a third person. Just by accident.


What Makes This Story ‘Real’

The first serious problem lovers face, confrontation with their parents. It’s inspired by my own friend and her parents – as they try making sense of the spiraling realities of love.


Extract-

“What were you doing?” her mother’s crisp voice prodded
“Nothing” She said staring at her mother standing at the doorway.
Do you want me to believe that” her mother asked as she came into the room and sat down on her bed.

The clock stuck two; its chimes ringing across the silent room, jumping from one blank wall to another slowly dissolving into the darkness of the night. The fan continued in its merry go round, a dull creak with every other round, probably just not merry enough. And despite all those swirls of air, that it threw forth, she started to sweat.

Who were you chatting to” her mother’s voice was eerily calm.
“No one” She blurted out, the words tumbling out of her and slipping into open.
“No one??
Yes, no one”

Her mother sighed. “You forgot to switch off the modem and the web camera. The computer itself is still running.” She paused and looked at her daughter’s widening eyes.
Was it in Skype?? Who was he? You were chatting with

“Who??” she mouthed back. The actual words never crossed her throat; they just suffocated themselves rather than lying to her mother again. She looked up at her mother, tearing herself up into pieces, not knowing what to say. She felt her fingers through her loose hair, caressing with all the love and then a stifled tear shot across her cheeks.

“It’s okay. Please don’t lie” her mother shifted herself to hold her head to her bosom.
“It’s just that ” her mother paused “after all the freedom I gave you, after all the open environment I provided, after everything” her voice wavered for the first time “I ….. I had to learn it like this.”


Endnote: This is my entry for the HarperCollins–IndiBlogger Get Published contest, which is run with inputs from Yashodhara Lal and HarperCollins India.

15 comments:

indu chhibber said...

Mother,daughter both feel awkward at such moments.

nan said...
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Harikrishna said...

I liked it but expecting a lot in the main story.. And I am eager to see it.... Waiting for it anxiously :)

Sasikumar Rajappan said...

Hi friend, I'm hosting a contest on 55 Fiction. It would be really Interesting. So here I'm very happy to invite you to participate... take care... "Best 55 Fictionist"

muthu said...

@ indu chhibber --

In all honesty, awkward is a light word to use. If the mother is literally discovering that her daughter has kept something as personal as her love life away from her- it will shatter her.

Don't you think so??

Also, the guilt that the girl feels will be suffocating....

muthu said...

@ Harikrishna ---

Thanks a million for your warm words...

muthu said...

@ Sasikumar Rajappan ---

Yes, It's good of you to invite me and Yes, I love writing up short stories... And yes, I have participated.

But it would have been better- If you would have taken the time to go through the post that you have posted the comment on and wrote what you felt about it.

Don't you think so...

Sasikumar Rajappan said...

These are the problems many lovers face... even though it is an usual one the way you wrote it, makes a different... all the best bro take care...

Nirvaan said...

You have picked up a real topic, and ofcourse a very subtle one as well! You have left me anxiously waiting for the full story!
Would like to know your thoughts about my idea as well:)
http://www.indiblogger.in/getpublished/idea/302/

Nirvaan said...

You have picked up a real topic, and ofcourse a very subtle one as well! You have left me anxiously waiting for the full story!
Would like to know your thoughts about my idea as well:)
http://www.indiblogger.in/getpublished/idea/302/

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